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I really enjoyed reading this. I saw a few errors here and there but nothing that will be difficult to fix. I can't wait to read more to see how ...

I'm glad you liked it. It's taken me forever to get a new story going. There will be more later on. I've written it just haven't had the time to ...

He shot her lover first? I love it. I like the way this was written and can't wait to read more.

I absolutley love it as much as chapter 11! I can't wait to read more.

Blackmailed???? That sounds too modern to be in this story. I've been reading this from the beginning and love it. I can't wait to see what jane is going to ...

Sounds interesting can't wait to read more

Interesting. I'm slightly confused but it seems to be a good way to catch the readers attention.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I used to hate rhyming poems and thought they were pointless, but I think maybe I've got something going. I'll try to have more soon.

I liked it but it needs work. Add more detail and imagery. I see that the person has just killed themselves out of lonliness. I don't know if that is ...

The Purple Balloon covered everything I was going to say. I will add that to me it is choppy if that makes any sense. Add punctuation where it is needed ...

I absolutely loved the fourth stanza. I was wondering too if perhaps the narrator is refering to the past or not. Besides that no crit.

*Rolling in laughter* I enjoyed writing it and hoped others liked reading it. I posted it for the purpose of making people laugh and I see that it worked. I ...

Yes i know it is stupid but that's the point.

I like it too, but yeah it does seem like something that came from Avril Lavigne.

Short and sweet. It has a good message in it. My advice though is not to capitalize the first letter of every line unless it is a new sentence. I ...